Teachers: humans that are hated by their students or hard working people that are just misunderstood?
The yobs (students) believe that the teachers are unloving and bitter human beings that don’t care about anything but giving their student detentions and handing out tonnes and tonnes of homework. Not that long ago I had a half hour detention because of my rude, completely ignorant and disrespectful class. Very rarIy I can get off lucky. However most of the time it’s detention after detention. Constantly.
Students have complained about how teachers give out too much homework and that the masses and masses of homework carry on ruining their lives. The teachers either give out short but extremely hard homework or unbeleavibly long material that is slightly easy.
Moreover it’s been said that teachers think up of extremely hard work for their classes, just to ruin their students lives. All day the students complain about how hard the teachers push them to do the work, but the students are just disruptive and don’t even attempt the work.
However the teachers do care about the students learning and education. They push us to do well. We just look at the work and think that it is too hard so we don’t do it. Then we talk and cause disruption. At this point the teachers get angry and give us all a detention.
Did you know that nearly all of our teachers stay up until midnight marking and planning and marking and planning. Trying inexplicably hard to provide us students with all the support and learning we need to succeed in our future GCSEs and lives? These teachers work hard trying to help educate us. Remember that many, many teachers work and work to push your learning ability to its full potential. Most of you and your families do not pay anything for this . So take it apon yourself to learn and take this opportunity to be the person you want to be, instead of what you think you can be.
Dont forget that this is your life. Teachers aren’t there to punish you, they are there to help you and guide you through your years at school.
When you complain about how teachers are mean and horrible, or that they push you too hard to do what you think is outrageously complicated work. Think they want you to have a good and productive future.
If you find the work teachers have set you too hard, ask how to do it. Yes it may be ‘long’ or ‘dead’ but it will be better for you in the long run. Teachers are there to provide you with help and support. You just need to put in the work. Many of the teachers here at this school spend many of their breaks and lunches orgenizing and creating work for us. That will help us improve our education and our future. However many of my fellow students in my classes feel that the teachers do nothing and are there to punish us and make us work hard for nothing but money. Well all you that think that of teachers are 100% wrong. Yes you may think that the work is hard but if you let the teachers do their job, if you pay attention to what the teacher is saying and if you actually attempt the work, then you may actually understand and improve your knowledge. And not only help yourself and you will also help the teachers by cooperating withthem and listening to them.
So take into account that the teachers do actually care about if you learn, they get paid for teaching and making your future better. Please listen to your teacher at least attempt the work that is set in front of you because the teaches spend hours creating these tasks for you to do. The least you can do is try.
March 26, 2015 at 2:43 pm
Hello Matthew
Thank you for posting.
Your task was to argue whether or not you agree with the statement “Teenagers are lazy slobs.” However because you have written quite a lot I will allow you to pursue with this.
It seems that you are trying to write a balanced argument about whether teachers are good or bad in your opinion. How about you use this statement: “Teacher’s are cruel, uncaring demons”
However you need to choose either to agree or disagree with the statement. Remember that to persuade you need to have a clear line of argument.
I really like your opening rhetorical question although you need to include a question mark.
You have also included a personal anecdote- Well done.
Targets:
Decide upon which point of view you are taking.
You are a student so you could use this to your advantage- Think about how you could use pronouns like “we teenagers/students…”
Challenge task: Try to vary your sentence structure.
Great effort so far. I look forward to reading the rest and seeing how you have used this feedback.
Ms Andrews
April 12, 2015 at 11:34 pm
Hello Matthew – I agree with Ms Andrews’s feedback.
Your work has come such a long way since the beginning of the year – well done.
Targets:
1) How might you achieve the Perfect Paragraph badge:
http://achieve.community.edutronic.net/stage-one-writing/perfect-paragraph/
2) Did you know that your at least 200 words away from your minimum word limit?
April 15, 2015 at 10:13 pm
Matthew,
I can see that you have developed your ending since your last feedback.
You still haven’t quite yet achieved Perfect Paragraph or Expository badges. Not far to go though.
Targets
1) Re-read your opening sentence – I like the imagery here but it needs a colon – where should it go?
2) Aim to re-draft at least one paragraph in order to achieve the Perfect Paragraph badge
http://achieve.community.edutronic.net/stage-one-writing/perfect-paragraph/
How will you meet this criteria?
3) Always re-read and edit sentence length/structure – how can you make your meaning clearer?
May 13, 2015 at 1:40 pm
Hello Matthew,
The main thing that is stopping you from achieving your badge for Expository writing is the clarity of your expression.
Please re-read and edit your sentence structures and spelling (especially homophones and word endings).
Please see me if you need a hand,
Mr North
June 2, 2015 at 11:01 pm
Hello Matthew,
I can see that you have attempted to correct your sentence structures and spelling, but there is still some way to go – have a really thorough check.
See me if you need some help,
Mr North
June 4, 2015 at 7:56 am
Helo Matthew,
Now that your sentences are clearer, you must have a look at your paragraph structures – where are your separate ideas and how can you clearly group them together?
Where do you develop your argument with new ideas?
Let’s have a go at this together,
Mr North
June 15, 2015 at 6:51 pm
Please check and correct your spelling in your second paragraph.
Look at this sentence taken from your fourth paragraph: ‘Moreover it’s been said that teachers think up of extremely hard work for their classes…’ what is wrong here? Why? Where else does this need to be corrected in your essay?
June 18, 2015 at 3:00 pm
Please remove embittering from your first paragraph – can you find a word that would suit the tone more?